A Good Construction ( after Y. Amichai) They drilled leaks, axed the mailmast, watched us sink with the determination of saboteurs blinder than a cyclone. They took the boat apart, board by board till the hull was a hole, the sails, ragged wings, with the violence of hurricanes bursting blasts of hate. And we were such a good construction. A sailing boat built from a man, a woman and love shrouds. We floated in our sea, studied the course to hold. We even sailed a while.
Paula Grenside's Questions:
Is the "they" too obscure?
As it doesn't refer to specific people, but people in general, I thought it better to use the pronoun. Does the metaphor result effective?