The Art of Silence When I sit at table, have a meal, lift fork or spoon to my mouth, I know I am feeding the epicurean other inside me. I give her pasta, peppers, peas. She chews, swallows, grows large and dumb; she never speaks to me, reborn Demosthenes who struts, orates to laurel-crowned youths sprinkling arsenic on loaves of knowledge. Before they poison me, I'll join my dumbness, will learn the Art of Silence.
Paula Grenside's Questions:
1- This is a poem that has met difficulty
with some readers. Do the reference to Epicurus
and Demosthenes interfere or help understanding?
2- The poem was inspired by personal experience
at school--- so much talking and offering knowledge,
but little listening, at times We tend to "poison" them
as well as ourselves.
" Dumb" is used in an ironical sense. Not sure it works.
Any suggestion to make this concept clear?
Fading Pianissimo Midges in quarrel with the wind, we dot the flux of time and place while thumbing through life's scores. We skim spring's overture and burn in summer the sun conducts with cymbal clashes of light. We fall, in rapture, to chords of time still vibrating in brass leaves; last swirls before we fade pianissimo. Lyrics of faces recalled to the ear, frozen lines of a flute. Palpable absence. Boned nothingness where silver fingers play on a grand sky.
Paula Grenside's Questions:
This poem had already undergone three revisions, but I sense it still needs work, therefore, I'll appreciate all suggestions.
1- The aim is to depict life's symphony through musical movements
and seasons. Is the imagery excessive, overlapping?
2- The second stanza introduces death more as a perception
than fear . Besides, I wanted to highlight how dear ones who died
are absent and present at the same time; though the faces can
be blurred, the bond is permanent.
Thank you