Between Two Points From 7 to 8 I formulate you through geometry 24 degrees of your timid wave, your tight jaw's circumference, triangular insight. My active non-action semi-circles back and increases the radius your own private guardian angle. There is something I am missing a theorem, a proof, a law, two points, a line, a movie that explains it all. Hug the corners of my polygon but I would rather see the world from your angel.
David Meiklejohn's Questions:
- does the math gimmick seem too "hokey" and forced? Does the math
influence come across as the backbone of the poem which without the math the
poem would fall apart, or is the influence seem as a causal metaphor that is
subsidiary to the actual meaning?
- does the "angel"/"angle" word swap work? Is it too difficult to look past the context they are used in (guardian angel, see the world from your angle)? Do they seem like spelling errors or well-placed language manipulation?