Trattaneuto I tremble when the soft petals of your eyes gaze plumply upon my smile so sweet. When velvet wine sucks dry lips and I soften my skin into my dress- old rose in texture We're too in love to notice how we're drying out.
Caroline Seagle's Questions:
"Trattaneuto" means dry.
It's a musical term used for expression when playing. I thought this fit the poem appropriately because it is meant to signify the turnout of the situation.
Does the end leave the reader hanging?
Could I add more that would be beneficial to the poem?