Leave the Earth Behind twelve herons dance like those in a trance they lift their feet they flap their wings they never leave the ground. twelve herons curl and twist round about in the mist they seek and search but do not find for what it is they look. twelve herons glide along the shore they slide the snow does fall the sleet does too the wind about them wraps. twelve herons long do seek to leave the gray and bleak but they look too much upon the ground and never to the sky. a single heron does one day look up to the sky and say "There we shall go and away we shall be far, far away." twelve herons dance and disappears the trance they lift their feet they flap their wings they leave the earth behind.
Megan Kimm Snook's Questions:
Is there too much repition?
I tried to use the repition of 'twelve herons' to establish rhythym and then to contrast with the different tone of the following three lines of each verse.
What do you think? Does it work?
Also, is the meaning of it only taking one person to find the way and make a difference clear?
Please tell me what you think!
Thank you!