IMAGE OF EARTH AND QUILL

Guest Poet Joe Todaro



Family Portrait 

I was there 
early afternoon Sunday, 
7th June, prescribed time 
and place, to see you off 
see you on the liner, 
us out of your hair, 
waving; 
nary a batted eye 
among us, 
not a sorry soul 
on the dock, 
only hands 
in the air.


June, 1998


Joe Todaro 's Questions:

I would particularly like critique on the amount of detail the poem contains. Is the detail too sketchy? Further, can the poem be modified for more impact without overstatement; if so, how?


Correspond with Joe Todaro at
jtodaro@uclink4.berkeley.edu
with your ideas about this poem.

JT's Home page http//sis125.berkeley.edu/staff/jtodaro/main.htm



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