When I was You When I was you visionary lemons were mourning and holy water was flowing through your pale gems, through my rusty veins. When I was you whips’n pythons were dancing around a lost sombrero in my cartoon life, in your musical comedy. When I was you Chinese eyes were traveling through the solitude of your childhood, of my past. When I was you all the spires were wearing a tuxedo for an ordinary Mass, for an ordinary me, for an ordinary you.
Remus Dan's questions:
Are the stanzas balanced enough?
Who do you think "you" is?